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I'm spent and
sitting. broke and bleeding.

within my memories,
your hands are
caught.


I can't forget
what time forgot.
am I here yet?
have I lost?
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:icondanemark:
Danemark Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
Wonderful as always.
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theromantiquedead Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2008
those last two lines - sheer perfection, i swear. depressing, but sweet. and a very realistic feeling.
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2008
thanks
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:icontoume:
Toume Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
i think the world is falling down around us
and it's hard for us to just
sit by and let it happen.

i can't forget either.
:heart:
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LNIN9 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2008  Hobbyist
flow is spectacular, luvely rythem...
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2008
thank you
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:iconpardonm3:
pardonM3 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
You always have the most beautiful endings, y'know.
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
You have a heart of gold.
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:iconpardonm3:
pardonM3 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2008
:hug:
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:iconplayacardzright:
playacardzright Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
:wow:
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:iconb1gfan:
b1gfan Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008  Student Writer
There's so much ache in here Nicole...:hug:
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
:heart:
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:iconjusticelord974:
JusticeLord974 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
love the end, you can make so few words have such great meaning that is awesome!
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:iconflermigan:
Flermigan Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
you are brilliant, love. there is something very dreamy about this. like you have stolen some lines from a fantasy movie, like these lines are the villain's reasons for being the way he is, if that makes sense. it's an extremely powerful piece :heart:
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
Thank you!
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:iconshadowoflife:
ShadowOfLife Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
bouncy bouncy bouncy... short for impact, as always...
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:iconlarissaroo:
larissaroo Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful.
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
thank you.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008   Writer
within my memories,
your hands are
caught


lovely, nicole

this flows well
and I can relate

seems a lot of my favorite people
on da need a hug lately


xo!
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
thanks shane.

and it does seem so.
everyone needs to get together
and just hold on for a while.
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anitaROSE Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is fantastic.

brilliantly phrased, you've captured a something very familiar to me.

wonderful as usual!
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:icontangerine-tickle:
Tangerine-Tickle Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008
Short, but sweet. Beautiful flow. :)
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008
thank you
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:iconprosthetik:
prosthetik Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008   Writer
I can't forget
what time forgot.


I find this very emotional, something I can very much relate to.
:hug:
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:iconcries-of-the-past:
cries-of-the-past Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2008
thanks for reading.
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